Poetry project
Initially, my perspective was that I was the only that felt this way, but when I finished it I realized that I’m not the only person that feels this way and so I extended my poem to shout out to others. In my first draft I wrote, “Sensitivity is the way I feel Negativity is the thing that hurts Passivity Is the way I thought.” It just ended at that point and so I added a whole other piece about how others can overcome. So i wrote, “Happiness Is what we need bliss is what we need madness is what we don’t.” I thought it was important to turn the poem into a recovery type poem to support others.
I have shown growth as a poet through the changes I made to make my message clearer and adding more details to the poem over time. For example, “Treat me like I have done a satanic pannage, It makes me wish I can move to plantage.” At first, this sentence made absolutely no sense and so I changed it to, “Got less respect than a brown rat, makes me wish I lived under a sea mat.” When I finished my poem I looked at it and thought “is this poem for me or people that are like me” and so I made two different versions of the poem where I said everything as if i was standing up for a certain people which is what i wanted to do in the first place. These changes I made to my poem impacted my message by adding more rhyme and truth to make it more powerful.
One of the most significant pieces I changed from my first draft to final is the tone. In the first draft the tone was sad and heart breaking and it just ended “Got less respect than a rat” but then i changed it into a hert felt ending “The power of caring for each other”
I have shown growth as a poet through the changes I made to make my message clearer and adding more details to the poem over time. For example, “Treat me like I have done a satanic pannage, It makes me wish I can move to plantage.” At first, this sentence made absolutely no sense and so I changed it to, “Got less respect than a brown rat, makes me wish I lived under a sea mat.” When I finished my poem I looked at it and thought “is this poem for me or people that are like me” and so I made two different versions of the poem where I said everything as if i was standing up for a certain people which is what i wanted to do in the first place. These changes I made to my poem impacted my message by adding more rhyme and truth to make it more powerful.
One of the most significant pieces I changed from my first draft to final is the tone. In the first draft the tone was sad and heart breaking and it just ended “Got less respect than a rat” but then i changed it into a hert felt ending “The power of caring for each other”
Lend The Helping hand
“Lend the Helping Hand”
By Elijah Parker
My art piece is about a hand named Lend that loves to help people. He helps people because he gets a satisfaction from it. That satisfaction is called meaning. Meaning is that when you help someone, they feel happy and you gain empathy for them.
By Elijah Parker
My art piece is about a hand named Lend that loves to help people. He helps people because he gets a satisfaction from it. That satisfaction is called meaning. Meaning is that when you help someone, they feel happy and you gain empathy for them.